IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Museums should display art of their own country, or they should display art from all over the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

#museums #display #art #country #world
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Before showcasing a piece of artwork, a
museum
Use synonyms
 does not have to see whether it is of national or international origin. People visit museums with the sole objective of discovering inspiring pieces of work and they are unlikely to have
special
Add an article
a special
show examples
 preference for works of any particular country.
Instead
Linking Words
, most visitors want to see works from all countries displayed in a
museum
Use synonyms
 as it makes a visit worth their time and money. Of course, museums should have dedicated sections for national
art
Use synonyms
.
Otherwise
Linking Words
, many of these
art
Use synonyms
 forms run the risk of getting lost. Even in
this
Linking Words
 age of the internet, a
museum
Use synonyms
 is still the best source of information on arts, culture and history. Visiting a
museum
Use synonyms
 gives people an opportunity to see objects of historical importance or exceptional beauty in person.
This
Linking Words
 experience is totally different from seeing the images of these objects online. The main reason to display foreign
art
Use synonyms
 is to provide local people
an
Add the preposition
with an
show examples
 opportunity to see them. Not everyone can travel to Paris or London or Amsterdam. If works of all nations are displayed in a
museum
Use synonyms
, everyone gets an opportunity to admire them.
Also
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 fosters better understanding among nations. It
also
Linking Words
 attracts more tourists. In short, the main objective of
Use synonyms
Add an article
the museum
a museum
show examples
museum
Fix the agreement mistake
museums
show examples
 should be conserving and promoting
art
Use synonyms
 and culture regardless of whether it originated in their own country or elsewhere.
Hence
Linking Words
, I believe that museums should display artworks from all over the world.
Submitted by pnchanikan on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: