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The best way to solve the world’s environment problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #environment #price #fuel
There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over whether hiking the
fuel’s
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fuel
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 price is the optimal approach in order to deal with the deterioration in
world’s
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 environmental quality. I relatively have no consensus
with
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this
 idea. Without a shadow of a doubt, increasing the price of
fuel
 is not the best tactic to handle
the
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worldwide environmental issues. I have to kick
of
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 my point by highlighting
that
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 inelastic demand for oil on the ground that all transportation they are using in
this
 day and age
depend
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 on gas.
Therefore
,
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even
enven
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even
 if the
fuel
 cost
are
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 ever-increasing, people still have a demand for buying
fuel
.
For example
, in Viet Nam,
although
 the
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governments
government
gorvernments
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government
 raise
this
 of
fuel
, the residents still rush to purchase gasoline because going to work and study are still essential daily needs. As a consequence, doing so makes no
different
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 in decreasing the use of vehicles.
Thus
, the hike in petroleum is not
a
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 effective method to protect the surroundings. While
an
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 ineffective impact of the increase in the
fuel’s
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 price is widely acknowledged, there is a wealth of more
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far-reaching
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far- reaching
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 alternatives to address environmental issues,
such
 as utilizing electric or gasoline hybrid 4- wheel
transportations
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transportation
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. Both of them are run
on
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by renewable energy and don’t emit greenhouse gas, which
don’t
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 have
negative
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 effect on air quality.
For instance
, Vinfast can be cited as one of the most eminent
car
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cars
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make
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 in Viet Nam with
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eco-friendly
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eco- friendly
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 systems. Not only does it meet the demand of the dweller for
the
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travel but
also
 it
is not influence
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the
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air degradation.
As a result
, making use of electric and gasoline hybrid means of transportation is one of the most efficient ways to reduce the massive exhaust fumes, which can protect the environment well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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