The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is undeniable that there are
less
conflicts among the different countries compared to Change the quantifier
fewer
past
and considering it, Correct article usage
the past
Add an article
the government
government
should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed Fix the agreement mistake
governments
forces
. This
disquisition will discuss whether government
should stop expenses after armed Add an article
the government
forces
or not.
To commence with, armed forces
are backbone
of any Add an article
the backbone
country
, they are not only helpful in war but they
can Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
be used to make peace in
particular
Add an article
a particular
the particular
country
. In addition
, nearly 30% of funds
Correct article usage
the funds
spent
on Add a missing verb
are spent
army
just to train them and Correct article usage
the army
developing
new arms and Wrong verb form
develop
Correct your spelling
weaponry
weaponries
, they are trained to make the Correct your spelling
weapons
country
safer
place to live and Correct article usage
a safer
also
they are trained specially for unpredictable situations. For example
, in flood like
situations, Add a hyphen
flood-like
people
with special training required
to support normal Add a missing verb
are required
people
and at that time armed forces
are used the most as a tool to Correct your spelling
rescue
reduce
recue
many Correct your spelling
rescue
people
. Additionally
, primary
mission of Add an article
the primary
army
is to ensure national security, to defend Add an article
the army
nation
from external aggression and internal threats and Add an article
the nation
also
peace and security can be maintained within the borders.
In some countries like India and the UK, the military was weaker compared to other country`s army but
, Fix the agreement mistake
countries'armies
these
Correct word choice
but these
Correct your spelling
countries
cuntries
spent Correct your spelling
countries
their
large proportion of Change the word
a
economy
on Correct pronoun usage
their economy
military
and both ranked 3rd and 4th safest countries to live in. Correct article usage
the military
Moreover
, if armed forces
are not trained enough then
it will be disaster
for any Add an article
a disaster
country
, as they cannot survive in war kind of situations and get defeated by other country`s
aggression. Fix the agreement mistake
countries'
For example
, in recent times, the Taliban took over Afghanistan and started Correct your spelling
ruling
pulling
rolling
rulling
on Correct your spelling
ruling
Correct article usage
the people
people
of Afghanistan, in Correct article usage
the people
Correct determiner usage
this
these kind
of situation trained armed Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
forces
are used and they fight till their last
breath to protect their country
.
In conclusion, I totally disagree with the statement that says government
should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed Add an article
the government
forces
because they fight for their nation and for people
of it, they have Correct article usage
the people
courage
to protect the families of their Change the article
the courage
country
without thinking about their country
and they can be used in every difficult situation.Submitted by rahulgpatel19 on
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