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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #price #fuel
The diagram presents an overview of key stages involved in the manufacturing of
brick
 from three different raw materials
such
 as sand, clay, and water. The whole process of
brick
 production starts when
clay
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 is dug from the ground. Following
this
, dug clay is filtered through a mental grid so that any impurities can be removed before being rolled to the following stage. After
this
, sand and water
is
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 added to
this
 process before either
cut
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 by a wire or
molded
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 in order to make the product have the
desirable
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 shape and both tactics are used to produce bricks. After that,
brick
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 is moved into the drying oven and is dried in an oven
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 1 to 2 days before being heated in 2 levels of heat in a kiln which are 200-980 and 870-1300 respectively. After that, it
is went
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 into a cooling chamber to reduce heat
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 two to three days.
Subsequently
, a penultimate stage which is
packaging
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 is carried out. It
then
 leads to the final stage of the process where
brick
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 are delivered to the market.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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