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creative artists should always be given the freedom express their own ideas (in word, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. there should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#artists #freedom #word #pictures #music #film #government #restrictions
The phenomenon of strict policies to control creative
artists
 has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
 issue in question may be, I completely disagree with the idea is that giving freedom to them, but sacrificing other things. Of all the reasons why I agree to establish a law to limit the way that allowing creative
artists
 express their ideas, probably the most significant one is that there is something only valuable in its good original status.
For example
, some tourist attractions are built by nature or ancestors
such
 as caves and Stonehenge. Some
artists
 would like to draw pictures on anything near him/ her like a wall. If they draw a picture on those stones, they will destroy the value of those things. So, setting up a law to control the artist's behaviour is necessary. Another reason that should not be overlooked is protecting
artists
 themself.
For instance
, strict policies to control the expression way of
artists
 can protect them from legal issues like property rights. A lot of
artists
 lost their right to the product because they used the wrong way to make their music or film.
As a result
, a clear policy can be the guideline which helps those people who want to create artwork to their own wish. Under
this
 line of thinking, it seems to me that creating a policy not only protects others and protects
artists
 far away from those unnecessary problems.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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