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Buying things on the internet, such asbooks, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #asbooks #air #ticket #groceries
In modern
time
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, everything is easily
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available
avilable
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available
 on the online platform. Many are purchasing from the internet like books, tickets and groceries and online shopping becoming more famous
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everywhere
evrywhere
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everywhere
 around the world. In
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 I will tell you about
positives
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the positives
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 of internet buying.
To begin
 with, there can be many drawbacks
of
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to
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 buying
products
 online. One of the main
setback
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setbacks
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 is
delivery
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the delivery
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 of defective or expired
products
. To explain more, many online
platform
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platforms
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 try to distribute old
products
 which are left in the warehouse to clear their stock.
For example
, Amazon is delivering stones in the box of Apple and they are doing
repeatedly
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it repeatedly
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.
As a result
, these sites are not trustable. On the other side, there are
few
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 advantages of online purchasing.
Firstly
, it saves
time
.
In other words
, individuals can order or book anything
such
 as books, air tickets, groceries and electronic gadgets from any place and anytime, these platforms are saving a lot of
time
 for corporate workers.
Secondly
, many choices are available
on
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 the same place and they choose and compare the price before buying something.
For example
,
Skyscanner
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the Skyscanner
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 website helps you to compare
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the price
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price
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prices
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 of flight tickets
of
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from
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 different companies.
Therefore
, everyone shifting towards online shopping. To sum up, buying
products
 from
internet
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the internet
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 shows many advantages as it gives
of
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apply
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choices and
saving
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saves
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time
of
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for
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masses
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the masses
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 and varieties of
products
 are displayed.
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