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People no longer use newspaper and television. Because the Internet plays the same role as them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The significance of the
Internet
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 has been highlighted over the
last
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 decades. From
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 aspect, questions about whether the public no longer uses newspapers and
television
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 are raised. In my opinion, the
use
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 of newspapers and televisions has diminished to some extent. Evidently, reading papers like the newspaper has decreased in all parts.
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 is because people have become accustomed to watching the news on the
Internet
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.
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 undoubtedly leads them to access information easily and
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 in turn leads to positive effects
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 as saving time and money in daily life. What is more,
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television
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 has an advantage, young people prefer to watch a part of the news they want at the time they choose. In actual fact, society studies undertaken by experts have revealed that the young generation wants to spend their time effectively.
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therefore
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, improves their productivity unlike not being able to select and view information on
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.
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, the old struggle to
use
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 the
Internet
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.
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, since they are not familiar with the
Internet
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 and are used to newspaper and
television
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,
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 these media has a disadvantage, the old generation usually uses
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 when they want to know about a social issue. To recapitulate, reading papers like the newspaper has decreased on all parts and young people have become accustomed to watching the news on the
Internet
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,
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 the old struggle to
use
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 the
Internet
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. But still, the
use
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 of newspapers and televisions has diminished.
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