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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe that it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
It has been noted that
homes
 are scarce and so
families
 are beginning to move to the
countryside
 to erect new
homes
. While
this
 occurrence has its advantages like
development
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 of these
areas
, living in a serene
environment
 and being closer to nature, there are disadvantages that outweigh the advantages. These disadvantages include loss or reduction in
areas
 where
families
 can go
to
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for recreational purposes, wildlife in these
areas
 would
loose
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their
thier
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their
 habitat and probably go extinct and increase
in
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deforestation. Many
families
 like to visit the
Countryside
 once or twice
the
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 year as part of a Vacation or for recreational purposes,
this
 enables them to rest from their busy
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work life
worklife
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work life
 in the city.
This
 will not be possible if
homes
 are constructed in the
Countryside
, as the purpose of rest and serenity will be obliterated because the
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presence
prescence
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presence
 of buildings and
homes
 will convert
this
 formerly serene
environment
 to an
environment
 close to that of a city.
Secondly
, a lot of
animals
 like rabbits, snakes and squirrels inhabit the
Countryside
. Putting up buildings here would mean
destruction
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 of the habitat of these
animals
,
thus
 these
animals
 will be homeless and most probably killed by the occupants of
this new residential
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this new residential area
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areas
 as
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they
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the
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they
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 would see them as pests and a disturbance. Many of these
animals
 could go extinct in
this
 process.
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, deforestation will be on the increase, as definitely, trees and bushes will have to be cleared for these residential structures to be put up.
This
 could bring about
loss
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 of valuable greenery and
increase
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 in the amount of
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carbon dioxide
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
, as these trees and bushes are useful in converting
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carbon dioxide
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
 to
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oxygen
oxyen
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oxygen
. In conclusion, it is important that the
Countryside
 remains as it is, as a means of preserving our
environment
 and preventing the disadvantages listed above.
High rise
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building
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buildings
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 can be built in the cities where
families
 can make their
homes
.
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