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Meat Production requires relatively more lands than crop production. Some people think as land is becoming scare, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce world’s meat consumption? What kind of problem such measures caused?

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In modern society, many folks were able to eat different types of food by growing economically. It is a common belief some people argue that we should curtail the
meat
 industry which can cause the land to be lacking
due to
 raising domestic animals more than growing several crops. I will discuss in
this
 essay that there are some methods to solve
this
 problem and what is caused by these measures.
To begin
 with, the several ways of decreasing the amount of
meat
are
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that
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the government should put in place a policy that strictly restricts
this
 industry and thoroughly
manage
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manages
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animal farms in order to prohibit waste of the land.
In addition
, if they
force
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 to levy high taxes on both consumers and corporations when they produce or purchase various beef or pork, they might avoid selling and buying these kinds of products.
Therefore
, they will find alternative foods and it will lead to a decline in
meat
 consumption around the world.
On the other hand
,
however
, these solutions can bring a disadvantage to people's lives.
For instance
, parents cannot buy these sorts of food to cater for their
children at
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children's
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 groceries if they do not have enough
budgets
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 that can get them.
Therefore
, some kids might suffer from severe undernutrition
although
 they intake other foods because eating
meat
 can give them some opportunities to build robust bones and it
also
 plays an essential role in adolescents as they grow up in childhood days.
To sum up
,
it is clear that
 there are some remedies that can help to protect decreasing lands
such
 as policy or tax, but it is undeniable that it can bring some problems to the public who are in the low-income bracket.
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