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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In various countries, some citizens think that it is crucial and vitally important to spend a large amount of money on building and developing new railway lines for rapid intercity trains, but others believe that the money should be spent on expanding existing public
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 and foremost, constructing new railway lines between towns could aid people who are commuters and always travel between their workplaces and accommodations. on the one hand, it can reduce the rate of road accidents and would help emergency services to travel easily among cities,
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, ambulances will be able to transfer humans who are injured by accidents, as fast as possible to hospitals and healthcare centres.
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, multiple pieces of research illustrate that expanding existing public
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 could lead to reducing traffic congestion and saving people's time and energy.
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, we have infrastructures in our megacities and it takes less time to improve our present
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 committees rather than to construct new rail lines. If we could decrease traffic queue, we would reduce fumes' exhaustion.
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, carbon dioxide can trap the sun's heat from the atmosphere and it has a great impact on the global warming issue. From my perspective, I would agree with the
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 statement, because of the reasons which are written above. By way
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 conclusion, both views have their merits and demerits.
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, constructing new railways help employees who are
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 in the suburbs and outskirts and must transfer daily.
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, improving the present
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 committee can decrease traffic jams in metropolitan cities
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