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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Experts throughout the developed and developing world have debated whether it is necessary for a
country
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 to take
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responsibility
of
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for
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food
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production
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 for all national inhabitants and cut down
food
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import
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imports
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 as far as possible.
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 it is urgently essential for a
country
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 to ensure its
food
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 quantity is enough, I disagree that
food
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 import should be reduced to the minimum level.
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 essay will analyze the reasons, using examples from the IMF and the Chinese government to demonstrate points. On the one hand, there is no doubt that a nation should apply itself to produce enough
food
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 in an attempt to satisfy all
country
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deweller's
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dwellers
dweller's
jeweller's
 demands for daily diets. As
food
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 is one of the basic needs for humans to live, the importance of
food
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production
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 and supply cannot be overstated, especially when the
country
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 is suffering from some
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the
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special periods.
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, a recent report by the IMF shows that as one of the agricultural countries in the world, Ukraine can always guarantee enough cereals and crop supply for
their
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 people during the war against Russia.
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 is the main reason why few people in
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country
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 are suffering from staying hungry.
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, it is conclusively clear that sufficient
food
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production
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 is a necessity for any part of
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 world.
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, it is unreasonable to minimise
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food
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 import in
this
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 day and age, as it is
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an
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am
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 important approach to
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local
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the local
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 economy. With the increase
of
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 living
standard
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standards
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, modern citizens prefer to have some luxurious
food
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 which somewhat cannot be satisfied by merely domestic supply. For that reason, some local companies could grasp
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 opportunity by importing
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 foreign
food
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 to satisfy
inner
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the inner
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 market, which has become an effective resource for many countries to generate revenue and boost
economy
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the economy
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.
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, an extensive study by the Chinese government indicates that in China, the yearly
demands
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demand
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 for lobsters is around 1.5 million while the number of local lobsters is lower than half of it. Under
this
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 circumstance, importing lobsters from Australia can perfectly
fulfill
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such
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 demands and
also
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 have brought about
over
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an average 270 million-dollar profit for Chinese merchants every year.
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, it can be stated beyond doubt that
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 importing is indispensable since it is likely to satisfy
individual's
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individual
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 requests and benefit economic
developments
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development
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. In conclusion,
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 a nation should try its best to ensure
food
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production
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, claiming that importing
food
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 should be reduced as much as possible is
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absolutely
absolubtely
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absolutely
 not a wise option owing to its contributions to both
individual
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individuals
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 and
economy
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the economy
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. It can be predicted that in the future importing
food
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 will increasingly grow in importance.

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