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Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions?

#people #employment #jobs
The time of 21st century has witnessed
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significant development in the field of infrastructure and other developments. Nowadays,
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 of young individuals get jobs, even some of them do work from home,
according
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 different
technological
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skill
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 they have. Whereas, older
people
 who need
to
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employment
they
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must have to compete with
these young generation
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this young generation
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 for the same jobs,
but
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old
age
 individuals
had
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lack
of
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technological
skills
 as compared to younger
people
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the different causes and solutions,
also
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 give my opinion in the conclusion paragraph. In
this
 contemporary era, technological
skills
 are the main important part for
people
 to get better
employment
 in different sectors.
However
, old
age
people
 cannot compete
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 young generation, because in the past there was not exist
this
 level of
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.
Also
, hundred years ago,
the
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basic facilities
such
 as
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 different kitchen accessories from clay and cotton clothes made from
the
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basic wooden machinery, these facilities helpful for old
age
people
 to
compete
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employment
. On the other side,
there
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 multifold solutions are available to give
the
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employment
for
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 old
people
.
Firstly
,
government
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 must have to organise some events, which
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 based on
the
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technological
skills
 and how to access the different types
devices
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.
Secondly
, somewhere young individuals must have to support older
people
 as well as help them
in
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throughout heavy
works
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such
 as loading, transport and logistics and so on. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that if old
people
 compete in technological
skills
than
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 there is
a
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one factor, where old
people
 cannot fit regarding
to
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the physique.
Hence
,
young
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 generation must have to support old
age
people
to
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by
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 learn
them
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new
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newly
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 developed
skills
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intergenerational competition
  • Age discrimination
  • Adaptability
  • Hiring practices
  • Workforce diversity
  • Upskilling
  • Lifelong learning
  • Flexible working arrangements
  • Ageism
  • Technological proficiency
  • Productivity concerns
  • Diverse skillsets
  • Legislative protection
  • Employment equity
  • Biases
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