Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions?

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The time of 21st century has witnessed
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significant development in the field of infrastructure and other developments. Nowadays,
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of young individuals get jobs, even some of them do work from home,
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different
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they have. Whereas, older
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who need
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employment
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must have to compete with
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for the same jobs,
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old
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lack
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technological
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as compared to younger
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give my opinion in the conclusion paragraph. In
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contemporary era, technological
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are the main important part for
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to get better
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in different sectors.
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, old
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people
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cannot compete
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young generation, because in the past there was not exist
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basic facilities
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different kitchen accessories from clay and cotton clothes made from
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basic wooden machinery, these facilities helpful for old
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employment
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multifold solutions are available to give
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employment
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old
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must have to organise some events, which
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based on
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technological
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and how to access the different types
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, somewhere young individuals must have to support older
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as well as help them
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throughout heavy
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as loading, transport and logistics and so on. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that if old
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compete in technological
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one factor, where old
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cannot fit regarding
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the physique.
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generation must have to support old
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people
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learn
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developed
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intergenerational competition
  • Age discrimination
  • Adaptability
  • Hiring practices
  • Workforce diversity
  • Upskilling
  • Lifelong learning
  • Flexible working arrangements
  • Ageism
  • Technological proficiency
  • Productivity concerns
  • Diverse skillsets
  • Legislative protection
  • Employment equity
  • Biases
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