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Supermarket should only products from within their own country rather than import from overseas. What are your opinion on this ?

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The
government
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 should laws for sellers that
supermarkets
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 should only sell
food
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products
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 from their own
country
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 rather than other
countries
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. These laws
approved
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 by the
government
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, and there are many advantages for own
country
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. I will discuss the advantage when selling
food
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products
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 made in their
country
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 in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, when people sell
food
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 in their own
country
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. There are many advantages not only for sellers but
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the
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government
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. If
supermarkets
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 should only sell
products
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 from within their own
country
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 the supermarket values increased and
also
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 increased income because they do not pay for transportation to other
countries
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.
As a result
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, the
government
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also
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 raise their income.
For example
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, in ,India the reliance supermarket sells only
products
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 made in India.
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, they would be promoted by the Indian
government
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 and increase their revenue.
Moreover
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, when
products
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 came from other
countries
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 that sellers must pay their taxes and
also
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 pay for transportation.
As a result
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,
supermarkets
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' profits would decrease.
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, the
government
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 should make laws and only promote
selling
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the selling
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 of their own
country
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's
food
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products
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.
For instance
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, some
countries
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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 UK and Australia have banned
food
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products
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 which are
important
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imported
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 from other
countries
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. In conclusion, there are many advantages of
supermarkets
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 selling
food
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products
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 within their own
country
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.
Therefore
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, I agree with
this
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 point of view.

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Word Count

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