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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examp les from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,
people
 have faced many dilemmas around the world. One of the
dilemma
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 is
that
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whether
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 living in
cities
 or rural
areas
 is better to live. There are several differences between living in
city
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a city
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 and
rural
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a rural
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 area. Economical
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opportunities
oppurtinities
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opportunities
 and living more healthier life are the obvious distinctions. Living in a
city
 offers
to
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citizens
to
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the to
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 earn more money than
rural
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in rural
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areas
 because the important number of companies,
fabricas
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fabrics
 and
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employment
employement
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employment
 chance is higher in urban
areas
 than
rural
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in rural
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areas
.
Thus
, over the past ten years,
people
prefered
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preferred
 to move
in
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to
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 big
cities
 because they could not earn enough money to survive and wanted to make more money which they had
did
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 before.
Therefore
, some
people
 think that
cities
 are the best places to live compared to
countryside
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the countryside
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.
On the other hand
, when
people
 started to live in
city
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the city
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, the level of stress is increasing willingly or unwillingly.
Thus
,
this
 situation leads to some health problems.
In addition
,according to a great of many health reports,
people
 who are living in rural
areas
 are having fewer heart and respiratory issues than
the
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others. So, as
cities
makes
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 citizens less healthy, they tend to live in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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. In conclusion, when living in a
city
 compare with living in
rural
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a rural
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 area, there are various not only advantages but
also
 disadvantages. Economical possibilities and living more healthier life are the two of them.
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