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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Annually there are a few
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 which tend to become forgotten. A part of humanity believes that dying of
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 is not substantial
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 if there are fewer
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, it will be simpler to live. I entirely disagree with
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 because the death of some
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's mother
language
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 can cause avoidance of their traditions,
multiplicity
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the multiplicity
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 of views and failure of the country. In the
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 I am going to show the reasons for my thoughts.
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 of all, as
Akmet
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Akismet
 Baityrson, a national teacher said, “ A
language
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 is the beginning of a culture”. If any dialect was forgotten, everybody would not remember anything about the heritage because there is no path to investigate civilization without understanding anything of it.
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, the Latin
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 disappeared from the face of
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, and nobody was using it because the nation was divided around the world. Luckily, there were a lot of innovations which were accomplished in Latin and kept it alive;
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, there are a few
people
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 who are aware of the traditions of that culture, which makes it fade over time.
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, a significant piece
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 humanity loses after the death of a tongue is the diversity of views.
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 many
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 disturb
people
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 from
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 life, they precisely push us to make progress. The difference
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languages
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 creates
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 of outlooks on every sphere of life. One of them helps linguists to figure out arguments between opponents in a way of its toughness and ability to assure
like
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 the Russian
language
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 can. Another gives an idea to tackle the issue of motivation, discipline and self-development
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 English. The other demonstrates a person simultaneously in hilarious and
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 ways through
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 meanings and pronunciations like the Kazakh
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.
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,
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 consist of their own capacities. Meanwhile, every one of them has a mutual thing - making
people
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 hopeful and obsessively patriotic for their Motherland. Each nationality is proud of its
language
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. The
language
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 provides hope, wishes and development. Throughout history, there were situations when a country lost its independence and it was fighting for it. Those days the main thing which was uniting
people
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 was the
language
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. It halted, bearing a crash.
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, it helped to gain
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new independence, which helped the country to step into a road of flourishing. The case was about Kazakhstan. In conclusion, the disappearance of tongues does not help,
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 it will cause more issues. Constantly, dialects develop heritage, figure out troubles between
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 and gather them in complicated days. An essential part is that nothing can describe a nation better than its
language
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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