Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places.

These days, majority of the business owners have
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smoking in their workplaces while some
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government has set
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for people
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smoking in places
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considered to be crowded. In my opinion,
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of smoking
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is one of the best ways of protecting the
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and avoiding some serious health problems and I completely agree with
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view.
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certain arguments
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this
statement. On the one hand, in fact, nowadays a number of companies have set a prohibition of smoking
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cigarettes
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cigarettes
as a rule in order to sustain their workplaces with
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better
environment
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also
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the purpose of increasing their
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productivity and to increase their critical thinking towards
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certain task.
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recent studies have shown that
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majority
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of the companies which have banned smoking were able to increase their
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productivity compared to the companies which have not officially set certain rules about smoking yet.
Furthermore
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considered one of the best ways of protecting the
environment
by forbidding smoking
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society since the waste of
cigarettes
can cause some serious
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such
as air
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.
In addition
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nature there are
also
some efficient solutions like recycling the waste of
cigarettes
rather than forbidding them.
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air pollution just by recycling them. To conclude, having weighed everything mentioned up, I can come to the conclusion
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that, the prohibition of smoking
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cigarettes
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cigarettes
indeed can help businessmen to increase their offices’ efficiency,
however
,
instead
of banning them recycling the waste of
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to the
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