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Many people argue that due to widespread internet accessibility, libraries are not necessary anymore. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #internet #accessibility #libraries
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 E-books. There is a debate going on among people, of which some think, due to easily
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accessible
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offline reading in
libraries
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agree with
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World
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 Wide Web you can easily get any kind of data, irrespective of the study genre. Some individuals think that there is no need
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libraries
 with large shelves and study tables, as they think, it becomes very easy and fast to get numerous informative materials on the web. They believe that setting up
libraries
 is wasting of resources, and the utilized expense should be utilized somewhere else to get the other benefits. Why I disagree with
this
 theory, is because of the fact,
libraries
 are dedicated places that are specially set up to create a suitable environment for learning and reading. We know the fact that
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 greatly reduces the effort to get a large chunk of data in
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 some reliability
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, by
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, I mean that on digital platforms anyone can build their websites to spread information, no matter it is true or false.
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 of misinformation.
On the other hand
, books are written by genuine authors and are analyzed by editors and various members of the publishing firm which maintain the genuineness of the things recorded in hard copy media files.
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benefits
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 of
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 and its easy availability, but
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libraries
, whether they are public or private holds a greater value.
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