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Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Raising the price of petrol for vehicles and other
transportation
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 is one of the best ways for some
people
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 who believe that can solve environmental problems. I would like to share some of my opinions about it.
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 of all, I agree that increasing the
cost
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 of fuel for
cars
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 and other vehicles is one of the best ways to solve environmental problems because nowadays there are too many
cars
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 running on the streets. Almost everyone has a car and does not like to use public transport because it is difficult to go to work by bus or metro ,especially from a suburb.
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, if the government can raise the price of petrol and make their
transportation
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 systems more friendly, it will make citizens and tourists use it generally due to the financial concerns.
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, the government can make some packages for
the
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public
transportation
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 to inspire
people
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 to take
them
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the
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instance
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 of driving their own
cars
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.
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, if
people
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 can get
discount
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a discount
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from
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 taking public
transportation
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, they will be willing to do it from time to time.
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, between different places, the governments can build systems for
people
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 to bike, if it is convenient for everyone to rent bikes from one place and return to another, it will be more and more popular for
people
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 to use
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them
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 and make the environment friendly.
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, it is not only because the
cars
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 produce too much carbonatite but
also
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 many other facts. Due to many studies, climate-changing is
cost
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 by many different issues which include making products related to meat, factories, agriculture...etc.
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, all of the facts
cost
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 different levels of environmental problems and it all results in
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climate change
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climate-change
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climate change
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. In conclusion, though there are many issues
cost
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 the environmental problem, I believe it will have a good result if the fuel price increase and everyone will definitely be concerned about the
cost
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 and make new methods to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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