Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to reset the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the contemporary world, hard work is considered
as
an unavoidable ingredient for success; Change preposition
apply
on the other hand
, finding time of
Change preposition
to
relax
is no less significant. There are Change the verb form
relaxing
plethora
of options available to relax, Add an article
a plethora
however
the Add a comma
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intensity
intesity
of relaxation varies by activity and individual. Correct your spelling
intensity
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essay will discuss both views together with my viewpoint.Submitted by arununni777 on
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