Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to reset the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the contemporary world, hard work is considered
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an unavoidable ingredient for success;
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, finding time
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relax
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is no less significant. There are
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of options available to relax,
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the
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intesity
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of relaxation varies by activity and individual.
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
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  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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