Some people believe that sports competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sports competitions. Do you agree or disagree?
There is
belief
among some people that Add an article
a belief
the belief
the
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sports
competitions are not good for emotional wellbeing
in the youth and should Correct your spelling
well-being
be refrain
from participating in Change the verb form
refrain
sports
. I strongly disagree with this
statement because sports
help in overall mental and physical development.
Sports
competitions dates
back thousands of years to Greek civilization which gave birth to Change the verb form
date
Olympic
games. The Greeks believed that Correct article usage
the Olympic
sports
competition
were equally important as much as Fix the agreement mistake
competitions
the
politics and diplomacy. Taking an example of studies conducted by the Correct article usage
apply
Univeristy
of Western Sydney, Correct your spelling
University
children
who actively participate in sports
show signs of early mental development. Furthermore
, this
development helps young ones in handling Add a hyphen
real-life
real life
stress.
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real-life
Moreover
, banning or limiting sports
competitions will do more harm than good as little or no Correct your spelling
competition
competion
will result in no Correct your spelling
competition
sports
participation. This
is proven
fact that the bigger the reward bigger the participation will be in any activity. Correct article usage
a proven
This
will negatively Correct your spelling
affect
effect
the health of the Correct your spelling
affect
children
who are already Add an article
a victim
the victim
victim
of problems like obesity, mental health etc. Fix the agreement mistake
victims
For example
, the sports
time allocated with the education module helps children
vent out the stress of studies and exams, which in general keeps them healthy. Some of
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children
who are interested in making Add an article
the children
career
in Add an article
a career
sports
may get discouraged to participate.
In conclusion, I would disagree that sports
ranking causes emotional distress but
on Correct word choice
apply
contrary
they teach how to control and react to certain emotions and lead a healthy lifestyle. Add a comma
,contrary
Sports
and related activities should be increased for all round well being
.Add a hyphen
well-being
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