Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree?

Smoking is becoming popular even though it is harmful to the smoker and the people around him.
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, smoking has been prohibited in all public places in many nations.From my point of view, I
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consider both sides.
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the one hand, smoking is
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tobacco.It is one of the causes of risk factors for chronic diseases according to the World Health Organization. It can lead to chronic respiratory diseases and transmit the
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not only to those who smoke but
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to their surroundings,especially children.
On the other hand
, avoiding  smoking in the offices should be warned as it can annoy
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the environment and cannot be a healthy area to work happily.The governments should take an action
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smoking in all public areas as it can be dangerous for young children and pregnant mothers. It can
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That is
why governments and companies should allow smoking in public places.   In
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that having weighed everything mentioned
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