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Many people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, whereas others prefer to change the type of work. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion.

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These days, We have an infinite number of careers to do. Some
people
 like to stay in the same
work
 for the rest of their lives. Whereas others want to try something new constantly.
This
 essay will address both sides of the discussion and provides a final opinion at the end.
People
 who decided to remain in their job for eternity will receive an experience. Due to the fact that they keep doing the same thing repeatedly, and sooner they will become an expert. They will overcome every type of obstacle easily.
This
 group of community is suitable for jobs which require a lot of physical
work
.
For instance
, working in a construction or factories, all the employees will have to
work
 all day in the same area and do everything looping until they resign. In long
term
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 they memorize every process and finish all sections automatically.
Nevertheless
, staying in the same career would not be challenging and quite boring for some populations. Our salaries will never increase and make
people
 feel aimless. If we change our
work
 path, our life will be more interesting. In Japan's scientific research,
people
 will be seeking
a
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apply
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better jobs that provide greater income and
easier
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are easier
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 to do, so they won't have to struggle and live with same daily life. In conclusion, stay in the same type of
work
 offering an experience until we became an expert.
However
, our daily lives remain the same and boring if we don't change our career path. Personally, it's their own decision to remain the same or switch depending on individual lifestyle.
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