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Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world what do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

#homelessness #cities #world #measures
These days,
homelessness
 is one of the most serious
problem
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problems
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 not only in my country but
also
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in other
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other country
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another country
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. It
has
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 affect
significantly
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for
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apply
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populations
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populations'
population's
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. According to that, it has lots of solutions. In
this
 essay, it will be considered about it with examples. On the one hand,
the
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most people prefer to live in
renting
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rented
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 accommodation because
of
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apply
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that it is cheaper than
own
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their own
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 accommodation.
That is
 why
,
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homelessness
 of number is increasing in society.
In addition
, due to the low salary of workers, many people can not buy their own house.
For example
, my
neighbor
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neighbour
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 bought
bought
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apply
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new
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a new
the new
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 house
by
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with
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 credit
however
 she could not pay his credit because his salary
low
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was low
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. So, she was forced to sell
own
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her own
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 things. The main solution
of
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to
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this
 problem,
if
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is if
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government
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the government
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increase
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increases
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employer's
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the employer's
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 salary after that, decries
rate
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the rate
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 of
homelessness
.
On the other hand
, some people are separated from their homes because of their bad
characters
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character
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 because they may not get along with each other.
Besides
, the government should help and provide money for poor and
homelessness
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homeless
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 populations.
Also
, it should control them. If society provides affordable housing to poor populations,
homelessness
 of level may be declining. In conclusion, an increasing amount of homeless individuals is of significant importance
for
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to
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 the government.
Therefore
,
the
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society should put its best foot forward to curb the issue.
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