Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world what do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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is one of the most serious

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not only in my country but

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populations

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lifestyle

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. According to that, it has lots of solutions. In

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essay, it will be considered about it with examples. On the one hand,

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most people prefer to live in

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accommodation because

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that it is cheaper than

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homelessness

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of number is increasing in society.

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, due to the low salary of workers, many people can not buy their own house.

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bought

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credit

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she could not pay his credit because his salary

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things. The main solution

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salary after that, decries

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homelessness

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, some people are separated from their homes because of their bad

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because they may not get along with each other.

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, the government should help and provide money for poor and

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homelessness

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populations.

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, it should control them. If society provides affordable housing to poor populations,

homelessness

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of level may be declining. In conclusion, an increasing amount of homeless individuals is of significant importance

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the government.

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society should put its best foot forward to curb the issue.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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225 words

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Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world what do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions?

In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this

The government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to eat more healthily. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays children spend lots of time watching television and playing conputers games. However, it does not help in improving children's mental abilities do you agree or disagree.

Some people think that punishment is the best way of teaching children to behave well. Others believe that it is better to reward children for good be haviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.