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Water pollution has been an increasing problem over the last few decades. What causes water pollution? How can we prevent this problem?

#water #pollution #decades
Water
 contamination has been increasing nowadays, especially over the
last
 few years and affects ecosystems and environments and can lead to the reduction and extinction of animals that are on the brink of extinction. There are measures undertaken to reduce wastewater in
factories
 and
also
use
 bioremediation methods to degrade the oil spills in the seas. On the one hand, the root of the problem is
factories
 which are producing goods which need petroleum products and
also
factories
 which manufacture,
for instance
, paper, and alcohol. Their sewage and wastewater can mix and blend with household resources and make
water
 polluted and it can lead to an increase in ailments
such
 as diarrhoea and stomachaches.
On the other hand
, oil spills on ships which are travelling by the seas and oceans can leak into
water
 resources. To prevent and remedy the situation, the government should
use
 high-tech methods,
for instance
, Environmental microbiology techniques. Bioremediation is a great and constructive method which leads to the degradation of oil spills by bacteria like Cronobacter and Klebsiella. These bacteria
use
 their enzymes to break petrol molecules and clean oil-contaminated
water
. And
also
 we could
use
 the bioremediation method to sterilize sewage and
waterwater
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Toxic substances
  • Eutrophication
  • Algae blooms
  • Pathogens
  • Nutrients
  • Organic matter
  • Marine environments
  • Coastal ecosystems
  • Microplastics
  • Food chain
  • Hazardous chemicals
  • Mining activities
  • Industrial waste
  • Agricultural runoff
  • Sewage and wastewater
  • Oil spills
  • Plastic pollution
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