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Many nowadays prefer online education to face to face education. Do you consider this a positive or a negative development?

#education #face #development
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 world. Especially, Education that people must have to learn through online
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 since covid-19 situation and
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affect
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presently
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. Many prefer online
study
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 more than
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face
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study
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 at school. In my opinion,
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 learning is greater than online
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, as I will explain.
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, studying
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online has a positive; For
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, students
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no
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not
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 need
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transportation for a long time to go
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that
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 they can sleep
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morn
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 than
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 routine and gain more ability to
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,
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study
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 can learn everywhere, children can choose places that make
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 feel comfortable and enjoyable, more than
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study
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remain
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 in the same room with a lot of rules. All of
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 are
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improve
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capability
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 for learning
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new things and
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 contending with an education. Which
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such
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 to choose online schooling more than
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, learning
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 online
session
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 is affecting
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children
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 development. The
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 session at school is
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, students and teachers can direct interaction, fundamental
teach
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 with
practicing
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 and nearly pay attention. Even
more
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 kids will
have
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communication together, play with friends, talk with
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 and attend
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ventures, that gain more experiences
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than individual, which make
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they
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 lack
of
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communication. So,
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 is more positive apart from the internet. I personally believe that direct learning is the most important
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 children, to develop in childhood through
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 activities and personal experiences.
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