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Many nowadays prefer online education to face to face education. Do you consider this a positive or a negative development?

#education #face #development
In the
last
 three years ago, the pandemic situation has a huge change
for
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this
 world. Especially, Education that people must have to learn through online
channel
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 than
onsite
 since covid-19 situation and
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its affect
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affect
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presently
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. Many prefer online
study
 more than
face to
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face
study
 at school. In my opinion,
onsite
 learning is greater than online
study
, as I will explain.
Firstly
, studying
through
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online has a positive; For
instances
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, students
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no
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not
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 need
to
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transportation for a long time to go
school
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that
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 they can sleep
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more
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morn
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 than
previous
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 routine and gain more ability to
study
.
Additionally
,
the
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study
 can learn everywhere, children can choose places that make
they
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 feel comfortable and enjoyable, more than
study
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remain
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 in the same room with a lot of rules. All of
reasons
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 are
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improve
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capability
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the capability
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 for learning
the
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new things and
increase
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 contending with an education. Which
make
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such
 people
favor
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 to choose online schooling more than
face to
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face-to-face
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face
.
However
, learning
by
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 online
session
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 is affecting
to
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children
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 development. The
onsite
 session at school is
efficiency
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, students and teachers can direct interaction, fundamental
teach
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 with
practicing
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 and nearly pay attention. Even
more
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 kids will
have
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communication together, play with friends, talk with
other
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 and attend
to
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ventures, that gain more experiences
more
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than individual, which make
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they
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 lack
of
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communication. So,
face to
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face-to-face
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face
 is more positive apart from the internet. I personally believe that direct learning is the most important
to
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 children, to develop in childhood through
onsite
 activities and personal experiences.
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