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Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, majority of the business prohibits smoking in any of their companies, and lots of countries have banned smoking in their workplace In my ,opinion every country should prohibit smoking
cigarettes
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 at their
work
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 because it is harmful to their health and environment I think it is much better for
people
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 without the
work
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, it is one of the great ways to protect the environment by having banned smoking
cigarettes
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, and because a lot of adults
smoke
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cigarettes
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 that’s why some youngsters try to
smoke
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cigarettes
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 I mean they are getting patterns
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, in a recent experiment by US’s professor some athlete have never smoked a cigarette in their life in order to get for the experiment. They smoked
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 40 days after that if they training in some sports. It is not effective.
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, prohibiting smoking
cigarettes
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people
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 is much better they
smoke
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 cigarette cause if lots of
people
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smoke
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cigarettes
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, they can get to
work
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 effectively during
work
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.
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, my ,country one time has banned smoking
cigarettes
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 after that productivity has fallen during
work
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. To conclude, I can say that there are lots of benefits and damage to prohibiting of
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cigarettes
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. If some
people
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smoke
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cigarettes
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 they
work
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 much more effectively in the workplace than other
people
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 it is damaging to their health and environment.
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