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The chart provides information about the number of men and women in higher
education
in Britain within 3 periods
either
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whether
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they were studying full
time
or
part
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time
. Generally, it is readily apparent that
large
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amount of people tend to do
full
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time
education
rather than
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
education
whether they are male
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or
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of
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or
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female. Looking at the detail, we can see that female who takes
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
education
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in education
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increase
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increased
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steadily from
1970
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the 1970
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/
71 period until
1990
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the 1990
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/
91 period,
meanwhile
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for the
male
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,male
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it
is fluctuated
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with the lowest point in
1980
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the 1980
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/
81 period with around 850 thousand people.
On the other hand
, if we take a look at
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the full
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full
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full-time
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time
education
level we can analyze that both
men
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and
women
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women's
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level
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levels
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grew in steady increments.
To begin
, the
men
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men's
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figures start
with
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at
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100.000 in 1970
/
71 and
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slightly
slight
slighty
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slightly
increase to 150.000 in 1980
/
81 until its peak at 230.000 in 1990
/
91.
Similarly
with women figures
that
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also
has
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stable growth
start
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starting
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at 30.000 in 1970
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71 to 100.000 in 1990
/
91.
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