TODAY, MORE PEOPLE ARE WAITING UNTIL THEIR THIRTIES TO GET MARRIED AND HAVE CHILDREN. DO YOU THINK THIS IS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?

In
this
modern era, enjoying a happy married life is a dream of every
person
. Regarding
this
, some communities believe that the maturity of thirty is good for a
person
to settle down for better life as well as enjoy the children's time before getting old. In
this
essay, I will discuss both points of view and give my opinion in the conclusion paragraph. The time of 21st-century
man
makes
their
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each and every arrangement on
own
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his own
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.
Firstly
,
wedding
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a wedding
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is a pure and holy relationship for all young generations.
Secondly
, after some ,maturity
man
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men
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have to engage with someone whom they love the most.
Thirdly
, getting married at the maturity of thirty is a good agreement by
person
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a person
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, because after 30
man
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men
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have to take responsibility for the entire family and if they have children after the youth of 31 or 32 they must ignore some bad habits
such
as chilling with friends in late night, parties, other habits, which one bad for themselves.
On the other hand
, some people believe that wedding is a personal accord in everyone’s life.
In addition
, it is a matter of the entire lifespan, because marrying someone without checking
woman's
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background
such
as his entire bio-data and family financial background is not a great determination for a woman or a
man
.
However
, youngsters want to explore the world and
merger
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a
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girl who comes from a different culture as well as it is better to sign to learn other nations' traditions. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that wedding is not important to enjoy the children's time, but before ,merger a
person
has able to take responsibility for the entire family as well as have enough savings to secure a lifespan.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • matrimonial timing
  • fertility issues
  • career-oriented
  • financial security
  • societal norms
  • generational divide
  • personal fulfillment
  • personality development
  • biological clock
  • extended adolescence
  • family planning
  • child rearing
  • socioeconomic factors
  • traditional milestones
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