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You stayed at a holiday resort recomended by your travel agent. Write a letter of complaint

#holiday #resort #travel #agent #complaint
Dear
Mr.
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 Smith I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction with the service provided by your staff. I was a guest of your hotel between 16.11.2022 and 18.11.2022. During my stay in the hotel, I encountered a number of unsatisfactory
service
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 and was treated with great disrespect by your staff.
Firstly
, the
room
 that I stayed
was
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 not the one that I paid for. I was promised a big
room
 with a
king size
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 bed, two bathrooms and the best view that the hotel has.
However
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 the
room
 wasn't anything like that it had one small size bed with no view and a small bathroom.
Secondly
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 when I told the staff about it they handled the situation unprofessional. The person that I told about the problem said he will talk with the manager.
However
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 he didn't show up after 2 hours so I went to the receptionist and show them the payment method the problem was fixed but the
room
 that they replaced
it
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was not cleaned. I hope the problem does not happen again to anyone else and the mistake isn't repeated. Yours sincerely
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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