Some people believe that space travel is a waste of government money while others believe it is important for human development. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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travel is considered by some to be a waste of authority resources,
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others consider it essential for the development of mankind. I totally agree with
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opinion because
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trips really cost a lot of money.
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, it can lead humans to avoid extinction. The authority does not need to conduct these rides since it spends a lot of money and it is only a waste of the ministry fund. There are two reasons for that opinion.
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,
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kind of project needs a huge amount of funds, especially for the research and development of technology.
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, Elon Musk who is the CEO of SpaceX spent US $74 Million for only research and development for these travel projects.
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, The Government still has a problem
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need
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needs
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to overcome
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as Poverty.
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, 16,7% of citizens in Russia are on the poverty line.
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, it is wasteful to spend money to do
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kind of project, and it is better to use the
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to overcome the urgent matter.
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,
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travel can help people to make a prevention plan if the earth
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a place
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not appropriate to stay in
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these two reasons.
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, on
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day we can see that the condition of our planet is getting worse, the effect of global warming makes the sea level go up and it is increasing every year, so in the future, some of the islands will definitely sink.
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, we can see that Betet Island and Gundul Island are drowned because of the rising sea level.
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, conducting
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research can help us to find another place
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appropriate for humans to stay. All in all, I believe that a tour of
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is a project that can have a good impact on us in the future, especially for saving mankind.
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, I think that only private companies can hold
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program because they do not need to face a problem like a state
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as poverty.
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, they can focus their funds
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the technology.
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Coherence and cohesion
Ensure the introduction clearly presents the topic and the writer's opinion. Also, provide a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points.
Task Achievement
The introduction lacks clarity in presenting the writer's opinion and the main points. Ensure to address all parts of the task, like discussing both views and giving a clear personal opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate resources
  • technological innovation
  • benefit multiple sectors
  • immediate needs of society
  • long-term survival of humanity
  • habitable planets
  • potential risks
  • space debris
  • national prestige
  • foster international cooperation
  • united global community
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