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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As
tourism
 has increased recently, it has become one of the
people
's priorities in modern society. The trend may have some effects on individuals and the environment of the
country
 visited. It is my opinion,
however
, that both sides benefit more from the advantages than the disadvantages. There are many advantages of
tourism
 to a
country
 and its
people
.
Firstly
, on the level of individuals, some tourists come from different countries and speak
a different languages
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different languages
a different language
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, and they need to be in touch with the originals. Cloud computing allows
people
 to learn a foreign language directly from a native speaker for free.
For instance
, 60
percent
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 of Egyptians speak Russian because of the high number of Russian tourists who visit Egypt every year.
secondly
 , that allow change
culture
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 between
people
 from
different
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a different
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country
 around the world as like
try
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now
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new
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 cloth and new kinds of food. actually that
the
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great
greatest
greast
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greatest
 thing
in
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about
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 travel for some
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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. in
addictional
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additional
 , on the levels of government . there
are
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is
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 economic prosperity for the
country
who
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that
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 take care
about
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of
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tourism
 to her. and the most famous example , is
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Maldives
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maldives
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the maldives
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 .it is
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dependent
dependt
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depends
 totally on income from
traveling
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travelling
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 to
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their
thier
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their
 land from over the world
in
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at
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 all time of
year
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the year
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,
moreover
 improve
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business
busniess
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business
 because tourist bay
alot
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a lot
 of local production . that evidence the
importanct
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importance
important
 of
tourism
 .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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