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In some countries other believe that game should control salaries and limit the amount of people can online or on a do you agree or disagree

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A fair amount of the public believes that
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 earning high wages are beneficial for the nation whereas others say that it must be controlled by the central authority .
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, I partly agree with
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 statement and the reasons for my argument are mentioned in forthcoming paragraphs. one of the main reasons is that investment increases as
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 have more savings with them.when individuals are working and are given extremely high salaries, they will have enough money to fulfil their basic needs and are often left with the extra money which they will use to open a new business.
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,more job opportunities will be created for adults and
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 there will be no financial burden on them.
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 ,if the government should control earnings and limit the amount
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 can earn,
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 extra amount can be used to finance other sectors namely health and education. Owing to
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,these are crucial public services for
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 which can develop the economy.it is the regime only which can bring a change in these services. By investing in education as well as health,these facilities will be approachable even to poor
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,the country will improve its image in the eyes of other nations and simultaneously they will come into a race with others developed nations .along with
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, the country's prosperity will upsurge and
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 the public will lead a happy life. To conclude,
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 high wages have several benefits
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it helps in creating new businesses, limiting the number of earnings
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 has various cons
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 as it plays a pivotal role in providing extra money to the government which is often used to develop some of the public sectors.
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