NOWADAYS, MORE AND MORE OLDER PEOPLE WHO NEED EMPLOYMENT COMPETE WITH THE YOUNGER PEOPLE FOR THE SAME JOBS. WHAT PROBLEMS THIS CAUSES? WHAT ARE SOLUTIONS?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intergenerational competition
  • Age discrimination
  • Adaptability
  • Hiring practices
  • Workforce diversity
  • Upskilling
  • Lifelong learning
  • Flexible working arrangements
  • Ageism
  • Technological proficiency
  • Productivity concerns
  • Diverse skillsets
  • Legislative protection
  • Employment equity
  • Biases
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