Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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that modern technology
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of
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both
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computer games spend huge time on
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connection to reality. I heard some kind of
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your ability to
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the
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social nets like
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can connect
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can share with
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other
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foto or video content, make friends from other countries, and rise social skills. So we can say
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both statement are true. But the way we use modern
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technology
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significantly
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every drug can cure or kill , it
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  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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