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People nowadays tend to take their family to another country when they work abroad. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

#people #country #work
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 goods
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 manufactured from different stages. It is shown that the products
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 obtained from the
wool
 of
sheeps
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 which are
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 from farms. The raw
wool
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firstly
 obtained by shearing it off from
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 with
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 shaver. It
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it
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then
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 thorough cleaning to remove any dirt and other contaminants before sending it for drying. After it is completely dry, it is sent to the machine for
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 process to turn it into wools and strings, latter is sent for recycling. The processed
wool
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bonded
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 into
a thicker tufts
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 of
wool
. The tufts of
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 sent to
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colored
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. After that, it turned into balls of yarn.
This
 product is
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 ready to be used in many things.
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, it is used to produce carpets for homes or
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 like jackets. It is even used in knitting as a hobby.
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