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People nowadays tend to take their family to another country when they work abroad. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

#people #country #work
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 goods
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 manufactured from different stages. It is shown that the products
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 obtained from the
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 which are
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 from farms. The raw
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 obtained by shearing it off from
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 shaver. It
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 thorough cleaning to remove any dirt and other contaminants before sending it for drying. After it is completely dry, it is sent to the machine for
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 process to turn it into wools and strings, latter is sent for recycling. The processed
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bonded
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a thicker tufts
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 of
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. The tufts of
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 sent to
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storage after
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colored
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. After that, it turned into balls of yarn.
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 product is
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 ready to be used in many things.
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, it is used to produce carpets for homes or
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 like jackets. It is even used in knitting as a hobby.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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