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Some people the internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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Nowadays thanks to technological discoveries
such
 as the
Internet
,
people
 are allowed to communicate in a very easier way through their devices and their apps. As a witness of
this
 phenomenon, I agree with
this
 statement because it is true that in today’s
world
,
people
 can reach out to anyone in a blink of an eye just due to an
Internet
 connection.
First
 of all, the Web has eased through the years the ways humans relate to each other, beginning with e-mails till the creation of social networks like Facebook and Instagram which characterize our routine. These communication tools are really useful in
this
 more and more technological society, in
fact
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 they connect millions and millions of
people
 every day.
Internet
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The Internet
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 let
people
 connect in every type of environment from the friendly
one
 to the working
one
,
for instance
, Linkedin is a really famous social media that lots of HR use to find the perfect addition to their company. If on
one
 hand there are lots of positive aspects relating to the
internet
, on the other
this
 virtual
world
 is compromising true communication, the
one
 that happens in the real life. Indeed, more often than before children nowadays have some difficulties speaking and just leaving their houses. They are so accustomed to
this
 parallel
world
 that real life is becoming weird and frightening. All in all, it can be said that the
Internet
 is easing human communication because through an
Internet
 device
people
 can reach anyone anywhere in the
world
, but especially children should learn how to use properly the
Internet
 and should know that the real
world
 is much more important than the virtual
one
.
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