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most experinces in our lives that seemed difficults at the time become valuable lessons for the future.

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lives
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 we have
a
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many difficult experiences. Most
them
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feels
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 hard at that
time
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.
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, in the
future
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 these
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experiences
experinces
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experiences
 become a precious to
the
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that person. I agree with the given statement and give
a
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reasons and
a
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profect
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perfect
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body
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 paragraph.
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 and foremost,
number
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 of
people
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a
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tough
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 in their lives that seems
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difficult
difficults
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difficult
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time
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 but in
future
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 become precious as
,
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 they learn a
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lesson
lession
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lesson
 from these and become successful in
future
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. Explain
furthermore
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, most
of
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successful
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people
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bylearned
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learned
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, a study by the university of Tokyo reviled that most
of
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welthier
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wealthier
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people
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 said
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that
thata
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that
failer
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are
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 the best way to become successful.
Thus
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, these
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experiences
experinces
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experiences
 are precious.
Moreover
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, most of
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time
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 we have a face hard
time
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 because of their small and big mistakes.
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, these are become good memorise in
future
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 and they feel good in
future
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. As they memories their
time
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 when they start their career.
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,
a
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artical
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article
publise
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published
publish
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by
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in
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times
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the times
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 of
Newyorksays
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New York says
 that most
high level
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people
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 said that
time
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first
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time
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 job is
most
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a most
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 valuable
time
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to
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 them. They
also
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 said that they feel difficult
that
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at that
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time
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. In conclusion,
i
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 agree with it because these experiences are precious as they become good
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memories
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memorises
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memories
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 and teach us good
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lesson
lessons
lession
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lessons
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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