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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

you are about to leave your company write a farewell letter to one of your colleagues in your letter.

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
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 letter to announce my new plan and talk to you . I
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 working
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this
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for this
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company
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 for twelve years. I always estimate my
company
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 and the workers of the
company
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 always were satisfactory to me. I always like them . I have never been deplorable mood subsequent
company
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. Our
company
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 is comfortable and our boss is an acceptable and serious person but
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, our
company
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 always becomes fair and apropos . Our boss is complacent
from
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 my work but sometimes he was angry because we didn't do work very reasonably. I have
not
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no
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 abominable memory in terms of my
company
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, but , so
l
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 am going to leave my
company
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 because
l
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 will move with my family next month , can
also
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 our new house is far from my old
company
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. I can come to my
company
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 but
l
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 have not adequate time so
l
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 decided to leave my old
company
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 and
l
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 will start my work in a new
company
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. My new
company
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 is acceptable and it is adjacent
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 new house .
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company
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 is enormous and there are more workers than in my old
company
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 . But
l
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 never forget my memory in terms of
company
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. I will try to contact my ex-colleagues when
l
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 have free time . I hope
to
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you understand me .
l
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 know my indentation is abstruse.
Your
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 faithfully Abdumalikova Jasmina.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your thoughts more clearly to ensure each paragraph has a single focus. For example, you can create separate paragraphs for your memories, reasons for leaving, and future plans.
task achievement
Try to use a more formal tone and vary your vocabulary. Words like 'acceptable' and 'complacent' may not fit the intended meaning. Using synonyms could enhance the tone and clarity.
task achievement
You have expressed your feelings about your time at the company and your colleagues, which adds a personal touch to the letter.
coherence and cohesion
The letter follows a logical flow of explaining your tenure and reason for leaving, which helps the reader understand your situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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