Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Self-confidence is the most important factor for success in school or at work. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

All
people
are made perfect by God . Persons are unique perfect creatures in the world. All
people
have alternative senses and
l
assume most
people
are distinctive eat others and their characters are standing . Can
also
, we can know how is the person with their character . Some
people
are serious, others confident and some
people
are shy . I assume all
people
use crucial characters only in apropos ways . They have different dispositions. One of them, most
people
have
confidence
and all
people
believe in themselves. I assume
people
's powerless aspect is their
confidence
and most
people
are confident in themselves , they achieve a lot of success other
people
are thinking to believe other
people
than themselves
moreover
they believe their all work for other
people
. I assume
people
do not have
confidence
in themselves, they will be failer and never achieve success . I think think that
confidence
is the key to success and many
people
achieve disconsolate rewards and its key is
confidence
, of course, all
people
achieve when they believe in themselves. I agree with
this
opinion because
l
am always trying
confidently
Change preposition
to confidently
show examples
myself and
l
am often afraid to believe other
people
l
think that other
people
lay me so do not want to believe other
people
. Who wants to achieve
first
the person's
confidence
himself
l
assume
this
opinion is right.
For example
: One pupil is trying every day because he wants to attend a competition. He is always studying and knowledge learning three subjects because he necessary three subjects. And he asks his teacher
then
he does not know the information
moreover
he is a satisfactory pupil in his school . But he has one problem he never believes in himself and he assumes if he is confident in himself, he would fail his competition. But failed his competition. In my opinion, all
people
believe in themselves. If they believe in themselves of course these
people
achieve in school or at the work .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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