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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is it? What are the best ways to reduce this problem?

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I think most
people
 who travel away from home for any length of time will feel homesick at the beginning because missing their own home and country is a natural reaction.
However
, I think it becomes less of a problem as
people
 adapt to the new environment and start to enjoy new relationships and experiences. Today many young
people
 study abroad and for
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 it is probably their first time away from family, friends and everything
that is
 familiar. The country they have moved to may have
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 different culture and language, so they need to adjust to
this
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This
 can be very tiring, but until they can do so, they will feel out of place and unable to form new relationships. Professionals who have moved abroad for work may have left older parents behind, or even young children. For
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 the separation can be worse because they feel so far from the
people
 they feel responsible for. I personally think that
people
 should try and prepare themselves for study or work abroad. They need to learn
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 new language and try to be as adaptable and independent as they can. At the same time,
however
, they need to set up ways of communication quickly and easily with
people
 back home, by using emails for instance, so that they know what is happening there and do not need to worry. If
people
 are aware of the problems, they can do a lot to reduce their homesickness and make their stay abroad a positive, exciting experience
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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