In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, in many countries is not easy to get a job for everyone even if they have highly qualified, most

people

have good degrees from

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university, and many

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want to get higher education, but at the same

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a lot of businesses shot down during Covied-19 or person who owns the company they want someone who has

experience

. In my opinion,

people

need to complete their basic education for university and have some internship which is relevant

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major.

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, my major is nursing, when I study at university I have over 1,000 hours in

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when we graduated from school and seek a job

people

may be glad to see who has relevant

experience

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, company owners rather their lower degrees and saving outcomes.

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, in my country which is Taiwan, when

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people

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are over

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30 years old and they still never had any

jobs

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experience

is not a good thing even if you have

master

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degrees or more.

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is very good at studying, he graduated from a nice school but he changes jobs all the time and even he just works for 1 or 2 months, probably he can not accept the social culture, he stayed in school too much time and do not how to deal with

people

. In conclusion,

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owner is looking for who has

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experience

and is a team worker, not just a person who has a highly qualified graduate but does not how to communicate with a co-worker.

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