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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, in many countries is not easy to get a job for everyone even if they have highly qualified, most
people
 have good degrees from
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university, and many
they
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want to get higher education, but at the same
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 a lot of businesses shot down during Covied-19 or person who owns the company they want someone who has
experience
. In my opinion,
people
 need to complete their basic education for university and have some internship which is relevant
their
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 major.
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, my major is nursing, when I study at university I have over 1,000 hours in
internship
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an internship
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,
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 when we graduated from school and seek a job
people
 may be glad to see who has relevant
experience
.
Secondly
, company owners rather their lower degrees and saving outcomes.
In addition
 to
this
, in my country which is Taiwan, when
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people
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are over
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30 years old and they still never had any
jobs
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experience
 is not a good thing even if you have
master
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 degrees or more.
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, my brother,
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is very good at studying, he graduated from a nice school but he changes jobs all the time and even he just works for 1 or 2 months, probably he can not accept the social culture, he stayed in school too much time and do not how to deal with
people
. In conclusion,
company
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 owner is looking for who has
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experience
 and is a team worker, not just a person who has a highly qualified graduate but does not how to communicate with a co-worker.
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