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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays people store knowledge on the internet. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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 day and age, more and more consumers use
ebooks
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 and other kinds of text on the
internet
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instead
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 of buying
books
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 at a bookstore. I personally believe that the merits of
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 trend are more significant than the demerits. On the one hand, there are certain drawbacks of storing information on the
internet
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.
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, reading texts on a smartphone or computer too much may cause some health problems. If one uses smartphones or other electronic devices too much, they may have eye problems
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 as short-sightedness and astigmatism.
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, sitting in one place and using a smartphone for too long may
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 cause back and neck problems.
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, there could be copyright issues when consumers use
books
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 online rather than paper
books
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. Information on
ebooks
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 is often less censored than
books
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 published in the market, so many publishers and authors may lose profit from writing
books
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.
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, in Vietnam, there are a lot of websites to read
books
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 for free, some of which are really expensive but are free online.
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, it is my firm belief that the benefits of consuming
books
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 on the
internet
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 are weightier.
To begin
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 with, reading
ebooks
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 is more convenient. The main reason is that readers can find their
favorite
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books
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 easily on the
internet
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 so they do not have to go to a bookstore to find them.
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, they can stay at home and read their
books
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.
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, people just need to have smartphones or computers and wifi and they can read
books
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 whenever they want to read.
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, the cost of
ebooks
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 is lower than published
books
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.
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 is mainly because
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 addition to the cost for the content of a book, there are many other costs
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 as paper, storing and shipping.
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, in
Vietnam
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 the cost of
ebooks
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 is lower than published
books
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. In conclusion,
although
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 consuming
books
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 and information online has certain downsides, I am firmly convinced that the upsides are more considerable.
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