Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Individuals are encompassed by commercial which has an increment impact on our lives. The main
merits
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of the trend
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to choose trendy things or information about it,
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it invites some demerits as well like false information and deception. In my
view
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point
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that
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cons of
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outweigh the pros.
To begin
with, nowadays, it has become a trend every individual can advertise everything.
As a result
, many people do not understand and do wrong things.
First
and foremost the government can not control
internet
sites.
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is an open interface, anyone can create everything and upload
to
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internet
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.
In
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the
internet
no specific censorship.
Secondly
,
advertisement
interferes with and behind advertisements the phone is slow.
On the other hand
, it is proven that with the help of
advertisement
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people can
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the
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jobs. To put
another
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way
this
is an opportunity to find a good job.
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,
it
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also
we can see the latest version or model of something. I think it will help not to stay with the trend and learn something new. To illustrate By advertising, we
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when the
next
Apple model comes out. All waiting for it. To conclude, it seems to me that
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invite many disadvantages
to
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the residents.
However
, there are some benefits as well, which should be considered.
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