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some people think that it is a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends . other people think it is important to keep working life completely separate from social life . discuss boyh these views and give youe own opinion .

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Some
humans
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 believe that it is a good opinion to have a relationship with their
colleagues
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 after
work
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time
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 , while , others believe that they should not communicate with their coworkers in their social
life
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 and it is very necessary for them . in
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 essay both sides of the argument will be analyzed and a logical conclusion will be provided . Generally ,
this
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 issue depends on an individual’s personality , it means some
humans
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 would not like others to know about their personal
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 and sometimes they think that if they socialize with their coworkers , respect is lost. Actually , some
humans
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 prefer to keep working
life
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 separate from social
life
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 and they prefer to spend free
time
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 with people who do not
work
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 with them . On the other side , some
humans
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 believe that if they socialize with their
colleagues
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 during the evening and weekend , it is a very enjoyable thing for them , because , they may feel comfortable together , so , they socialize after
work
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time
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 and even in some cases it has seen that two
colleagues
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 get married together and it leads to providing a high quality of
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 .
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 , when they communicate together in their free
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 , they can speak about their same habits , their favourite things and personal problems . In fact ,
colleagues
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 sometimes feel can be more friendly to each other , so , they increase their relationship . To sum up , it is very important we have a good relationship with our coworkers and we provide a friendly and positive atmosphere , so , communication with our
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 can be helpful and useful to increase the quality of
work
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life
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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