Watching tv shows and movies about crime is becoming more and more popular. Why is this? What effect does that have on society?

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Watching TV is popular nowadays and

also

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it is helpful to get the information about

surroundings

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your surroundings

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, sometimes it influences the people in

wrong

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the wrong

a wrong

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way. In

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the next

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paragraph

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I will discuss how it is going to affect

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apply

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society.

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crime

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is increasing

day

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day

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because criminals get

the

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apply

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clues by watching

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this

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these

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shows.

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, there is

availability

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the availability

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of many kinds of shows on Tv or other social media

such

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as Netflix, Hot star, etc. and in

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this

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these

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shows there are multifold series available related to

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apply

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crime

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for

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instance, criminal justice,

crime

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petrol and many more.

Moreover

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, by watching

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apply

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these shows’

criminal

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the criminal

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gets the idea of the

crime

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As a result

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crime

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the crime

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rate will increase

day

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day

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Secondly

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, a few months ago, a Hollywood series was launched

which

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whose

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name was “Money Heist” and it was becoming so popular everywhere.

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This

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this

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series,

to show

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shows

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the ideas of how the

crime

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and thief had done technically. It

also

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influences the children as well.

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, we should stop

the

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apply

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children to watch these kinds of movies because it affects them in

wrong

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the wrong

a wrong

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way.

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, these programs can create a negative impact on

the

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apply

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society. According to the survey, it is found

that

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apply

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in South Korea,

crime

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shows were

ban

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banned

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in 2005 and

then

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the 70

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crime

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rate was reduced.

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, it affects

the

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apply

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people

about

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through

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violence and

crime

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Consequently

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, every country should ban these kinds of shows. Agglomerating all the above points elaborated I would like to opine that by watching

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apply

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crime

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shows, criminals get the clues. So,

government

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the government

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should ban these shows to reduce the

crime

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rate.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

275 words

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Watching tv shows and movies about crime is becoming more and more popular. Why is this? What effect does that have on society?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people find it difficult to manage their money. How could the government help prevent debt problems and support such people.

In the future, no body will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree to this opinion.

At present a lot people use traditional medicine rather than going to the doctor. Is this a positive or negative development?

Some school children buy healthy food from the school cafeteria. However, some buy unhealthy food. What are the reasons for both these situations? Should schools be allowed to sell unhealthy food?

Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sport competitions. Do you agree or disagree?