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These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their families with them. Do benefits outweigh disadvantages.

In
this
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 modern era, moving to a foreign country gaining popularity day by day. Here,the debate is that, nowadays, most
individuals
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 want to go abroad for work purposes and they are
also
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 taking their families with them.
This
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 development has both pros and cons;
however
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, its pros definitely outstrip its demerits.
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 with, there are many obvious advantages of going abroad along with families.
First
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 and foremost, it can be really helpful for people, who find it hard to adjust to a new country. To explain it more, nowadays, many
individuals
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 move abroad for
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 study or work purposes.If they can take their families with them
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, they might not be
concern
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 about adjustment and they may not feel homesick or lonely.
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, it can be beneficial for the financial status of
individuals
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 and particular
family
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families
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.
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, surviving in any foreign country needs a better job and
abundant
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 amount of water.
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,
individuals
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 can get the support of their family and it will beneficial for every member of
family
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the family
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 in terms of career.
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, there are some demerits of
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 development.
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, family members ; especially children and older people, might face issues adjusting to
new
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a new
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 environment. To make it more clear, owing to
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language
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languages
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, elderly people and children find it hard to communicate with others.
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,
this
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 can give adverse
effect
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to
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 their mental health as they feel like prisoners. To sum up,
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 there are some disadvantages, I personally believe that these negligible demerits can be outweighed by merits as they can be helpful for not only adjustment but
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also
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 beneficial for financial status.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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