The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The giving maps illustrate the current building of a
college
and the choices for the changes in the feature
college
site
that is
prepeard
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prepared
for 2020.
To begin
the choice makers
decieded
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decided
to remove the footpath in the west of
building
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the building
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which makes the car park closer to the
college
. They
also
want to destroy the garden which
located
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is located
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above the building and
footpath
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the footpath
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under the garden.
This
destruction could lead to
makes
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making
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the inside
college
bigger and
icrease
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increase
the building length
to
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of
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the garden. In
continuous
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continuation
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we will speak about the changes inside the
college
. In
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the peresent
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peresent
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present
situation
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,situation
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3 classrooms exist, two of
the
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them
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in the
sout
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south
west and one of them in
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the north
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north east
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northeast
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but in 2020 class numbers will
be increase
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increase
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sharply and lead to five classrooms, four rooms
in
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on
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the east side and
once
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one
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above the new
libery
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library
location. Entrance doors
also
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have also
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relocated
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been relocated
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and in
new
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the new
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plan will
be see
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be seen
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at the bottom of
map
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the map
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on the south side.
Reception
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The reception
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location
also
will be changed, in present
college
it
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is
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located in the east of
college
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the college
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between two classes, but in 2020 it
located
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is located
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in front of
entrance
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the entrance
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.
Toilet
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also
will
changed
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change
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and will go to the north side and
at the end
,
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the libray
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libray
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library
also
will go to the
south west
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south-west
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of the building.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words college with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • architecture
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • facade
  • landscaping
  • expansion
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • pedestrian
  • vehicular traffic
  • demolition
  • construction
  • recreational areas
  • commons
  • atrium
  • courtyard
  • upgrade
  • sustainability
  • commute
  • ingress
  • egress
  • blueprint
  • survey
  • layout
  • zoning
  • modernization
  • conservation
  • integration
  • footprint
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