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Differences between countries are barely evident these days . Everyone in the world is wearing the same brands and watching the same TV channels and movies. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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Today there are many new technologies is coming up. Every day some new feature or technology is launched whether it be smartwatches, brands, web series, or new apps for watching some new and unique series. These changes are very evident as compared to other
countries
.
This
 how the same things are been updated on greater versions like phones, watches, apps etc. To some extent, I do agree that some
countries
 are copying them and living the lifestyle they are following.
This
 does not give a negative impact on development but encourages
countries
 to develop some of the changes from the following. It absolutely plays an important role to change oneself in a fast-growing world. It is very important to
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fast forward as the world is and accept the changes> It is mesmerising how drastically very thing changes within the blink of an eye.
This
 development, there can be some negative impacts for the following. It is difficult to live the same life as
people
 in other nations lives to match their compatibility
people
 can do anything for that. In
this
 fast-moving world, there are many cons like
people
 from the middle class cannot afford to buy all the new brands which are introduced and style themselves as they do. In some
countries
, poverty plays a major role because of poverty
people
does
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 not fulfil all the requirements they want to fulfil. The consequences for the following not only affect them but
also
 their surroundings and are now focusing to make themself like them.
For instance
, if one Indian have a foreign friend and sees the way of living and lifestyle of that friend it is very obvious for her to make herself like that
then
 she starts growing the same way as her friend
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and because of her other women will
also
 do the same to make herself like her. It will not only affect the
surrounding
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 but will
also
 provoke the normal individual to do the same thing
like
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 that girl is trying to do. As been demonstrated I would highly recommend following our own culture and our own living how we have been growing
this
 much rather than changing ourselves into someone else. It will only affect others. Watching
same
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 television shows will not affect much but changing one's lifestyle would definitely is a con.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural homogenization
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • economic disparities
  • media monopoly
  • standardized brands
  • quality assurance
  • local businesses
  • homogenized global culture
  • exposure to international markets
  • job creation
  • loss of cultural identity
  • peace and reducing conflicts
  • media ownership
  • viewpoints
  • global brands
  • traditions and languages
  • economic opportunities
  • fostering peace
  • high-quality products
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