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You and classmates have been trying to find a book for a while and the book is out of stock . Write a letter to the publisher .write a letter and in your letter Say why you need the book Mention what problem is And ask the publisher to republish the book or provide you with copies of books

Dear Sir or Madam I and my classmate
are
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students
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student
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 in a secondary school which is located in
Angor
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the Angor
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 region.I am writing to request a rare
book
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 because it is out of stock. I and my classmate attend school every morning in order to acquire an
English
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 education because we can set out on various voyages or acquire education in various famous universities abroad if we acquire the international
English
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 language.
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, we must have an
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 GRAMMAR
book
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 in order to study
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.
However
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, I could not find an
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 GRAMMAR
book
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 yet order to purchase it.
Moreover
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, it is not purchased through shopping assistants in bookshops .
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, I mean that I have not been obtaining for 2 weeks.
without
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 exaggeration
i
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I
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 mean that I have not obtained anywhere. So definitely I mean
that
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apply
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can Mr or Mrs publisher can you provide
with
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apply
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copies of the
book
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 to me ,please
.
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 Sure undoubtedly you will provide
with
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apply
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it to me because you are
honour
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an honour
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as well as
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 a brilliant person that I am sure . Thank you for your attention Yours faithfully sakina

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task response
Improve organization and focus on directly addressing the task points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure better paragraph structure and use appropriate formal language for greeting and closing.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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