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Topic: a great city should not be confounded with a populous one. Discuss the above statement and give your own opinion

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I think that
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 because
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degree
 is my point. Now I am considering studying’s advantages and disadvantages in
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 city and abroad. I am starting with examples
in
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 my life. Recently I
had
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finished
the
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first
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degree
in
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university
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 of civil engineering in my hometown, Moscow. When I was younger I was thinking that studying
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 Moscow’s university is
real
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 main because I was thinking that it has
the
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 very good opportunity for
future
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my future
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 life. But one year ago I started to guess, that I need more for
me
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myself
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. I had seen that
degree
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 for me. Maybe it
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 I made a mistake when I was choosing
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 and university. What about now? My concern
knowledges
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 are showing me. That if you have
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a abroad
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degree
 you have a lot of opportunities for a finding a good
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workplace
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work place
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. So, I decided that I want
studying
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 in Germany. And I am taking
the
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master
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master's
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degree
 in management in engineering. Now we are considering
advantages
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 and disadvantages of different degrees. If you want to be near your hometown, where your parents and friends live, you can choose
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 in
own
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your own
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 city, but you can be upset. It depends
with
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 where you live.
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, if you live in Germany
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for
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fir
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for
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 you it can be better. What about
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the disadvantages
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.
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 You need to change your full life. In
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 I want to say that
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it all
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 depend
with
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on
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 your
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choice
choois
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 and you fir me better
studying
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at studying
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 abroad.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Confound
  • Populous
  • Cultural heritage
  • Urban design
  • Sustainability
  • Quality of life
  • Efficient governance
  • Overcrowding
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban sprawl
  • Economic growth
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Public services
  • Metropolis
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental footprint
  • Inclusivity
  • Civic amenities
  • Heritage conservation
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